Beata Peragine
Monday, July 18, 2011
What do you think of this part of a gothic story?
Awesome! The only thing I'd say is to take off the last sentence, "The trees followed." and make "he ran" It's on separate sentence. Adds more tension and finishes the paragraph nicely. But other than that, great work! :D
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